It my best friend's deepest, darkest secret and it would be a hard one to keep. It was a Saturday morning i was getting ready to go outside when my friend called me threw the phone and tolled me if i could of go to his house to play soccer. So i went to his house and i came inside his house and he was in his room playing with his brother. Then he tells me to go to the backyard so we could play. So then we were playing until both of us got tired and we went to his house again. then he tolled me a secret that he wanted to do. I was shock of what he has tolled me. it was a secret that had to be tell but it couldn't because i promise my friend i wouldn't but i knew i had to tell someone.
Days pass and i want to tell the secret to some one but i cant because i promise my best friend i wouldn't. the days pass slowly each moment i would want to tell some one. Two weeks pass i could take it no more and i have to tell some one about his secret i ran to the church and i went to the priest to talk to him for advice to tell my secret or not. when i went to the church i stared talking to him he have me good advise of what i should do. i ran to the police station and i tolled them the secret of my friend the police officer took me to his house but it was too late my best friend went t0 do the secret he tolled me he was going to do. We had to go where he was going but i didn't knew where he was going he just tolled me what he was going to do but he never tolled me where he was going. i was nervous because i didn't knew where he was doing or where his going.
his mother was also nervous because she just wanted him back but he didn't. She was the only parent because his dad was murder and my friend was with him but he survive but his father didn't. then i tolled his mother what he tolled he wanted to do. I felt sad because i tolled her too late and maybe my friend could be laying down in the floor. The secret was that he wanted to get revenge of the murder of his father and he saw the face of the killer and when he tolled me the secret he said that he saw him walking and i followed him to his house. So he would go over there and get revenge. the police didn't knew what to do because they didn't knew where the man was living and the man a criminal but he escaped and couldn't been found.
The next day the police called and said that they found him. when they found him his shirt was cover with blood and his mother said what did you did. He said that he killed the murder of my father. Later they found the body and was confirm that it was the killer of his father. then the police arrested my friend and was put in trial. They tolled him that he will be serving serving some time because he committed murder but he killed a criminal that escaped from jail and killed two men. i was sad because i wouldn't see him for a bit and because he probably would be mad at me for telling his secret but this secret i had to tell because if some bad happen to him people or his mother wouldn't know because his mother works two shifts and she wouldn't notice. so if there a secret that a friend tells you and its abut some one life then you will have to tell because he could get hurt and maybe never seen again.
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10 years ago
Great work jose i like your story it made alot of sence keep up the good work kid im proud of you and also i try to make your sentence more shorter
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I like your story nice job
ReplyDeletebut you repeated ur self in ur 4th pargraph
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nice like jasmin said u repeat ur self in the 4th paragraph and nice work
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